2025年1月6日北京東城區(qū)高三期末英語試題解析

劉凱老師解析：文章講述的是關(guān)于一名10歲的男孩Drake在緊急情況下駕駛祖父的卡車，并成功挽救了祖父的生命的感人故事。

描述了事情的經(jīng)過：祖父Hugh在駕駛卡車時突然失去意識，Drake通過母親Jessica的指導(dǎo)，冷靜地接管了車輛并安全停車，還撥打了急救電話，最終祖父得到了及時救助。

寫作要點【劉凱老師解析】：

活動內(nèi)容：根據(jù)2025年東城區(qū)期末這個作文屬于介紹活動的具體內(nèi)容。

這里劉凱老師選擇了“探索生物學(xué)與環(huán)境科學(xué)的聯(lián)系”，并詳細(xì)描述了濕地公園考察的具體活動，例如水質(zhì)檢測和保護生物多樣性討論。

確保語言簡潔、層次分明，突出實踐性和學(xué)習(xí)價值。

邀請內(nèi)容：

明確活動時間和地點，例如“Saturday morning from 8:00 a.m. to 12:00 p.m.”

表達(dá)邀請的誠意，例如“Please let me know if you’re interested”。

詞數(shù)控制：注意題目要求在100詞左右。范文中詞數(shù)大約為95，符合要求。

語言表達(dá)：

使用禮貌和熱情的語氣，如“Looking forward to your reply”。

使用準(zhǔn)確的詞匯，如“interdisciplinary learning activity”和“hands-on experience”。

角色和背景：

你是紅星中學(xué)學(xué)生李華。

你所在的 “科學(xué)社” 要開展一次跨學(xué)科綜合實踐活動。

你的好友 Jim 在國際部學(xué)習(xí)。

任務(wù)要求：

用英語給 Jim 寫一封郵件。

郵件內(nèi)容需包括：

活動內(nèi)容。

發(fā)出邀請。

提示詞和注意事項：

提示詞：跨學(xué)科綜合實踐活動（interdisciplinary learning activity）。

注意事項：

詞數(shù) 100 左右。

開頭（Dear Jim,）和結(jié)尾（Yours, Li Hua）已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)。

句式多樣化

使用復(fù)合句：

劉凱老師組句： “We will have group discussions, hands - on experiments, and creative presentations.”

劉凱老師組句高級版：“We will have a series of activities, including group discussions where we can exchange ideas, hands - on experiments which enable us to apply theoretical knowledge, and creative presentations through which we can showcase our innovative thinking.”

這里將簡單句改為包含定語從句的復(fù)合句，使句子更加豐富。

使用非謂語動詞：

劉凱老師組句：“I sincerely invite you to join us. It will be a great opportunity for you to learn and have fun with us.”

劉凱老師組句高級版：“I sincerely invite you to join us, providing you with a great opportunity to learn and have fun.”

這里使用了現(xiàn)在分詞 “providing” 作狀語，使句子更加緊湊。

劉凱老師高級句式

倒裝句：“Not only will you gain knowledge from different subjects, but you will also make new friends.”（你不僅能從不同學(xué)科中獲取知識，還能交到新朋友。）這種倒裝句能夠強調(diào)句子中的內(nèi)容，使語氣更加強烈。

強調(diào)句：“It is this interdisciplinary learning activity that will broaden your horizons.”（正是這次跨學(xué)科學(xué)習(xí)活動將拓寬你的視野。）強調(diào)句可以突出重要信息，引起讀者注意。

虛擬語氣：“If you were to participate in this activity, you would find it extremely rewarding.”（如果你參加這次活動，你會發(fā)現(xiàn)它非常有意義。）虛擬語氣可以使語氣更加委婉、客氣，同時也能體現(xiàn)語言的復(fù)雜性。

獨家原創(chuàng)寫作：

Dear Jim,

I hope this letter finds you in good health. Our Science Club is about to launch an interdisciplinary learning endeavor. This event will integrate knowledge from various fields such as science, mathematics, and art. We will engage in a series of activities, including group discussions where we can exchange ideas, hands - on experiments which enable us to apply theoretical knowledge, and creative presentations through which we can showcase our innovative thinking.

I sincerely invite you to participate in this activity, providing you with a great opportunity to learn and have fun. Not only will you gain knowledge from different subjects, but you will also make new friends. It is this interdisciplinary learning activity that will broaden your horizons.

Yours,

Li Hua

劉凱老師構(gòu)思

1. 明確寫作目的：寫作任務(wù)是給好友Jim寫信，邀請他參加一個跨學(xué)科綜合實踐活動。重點是：

活動內(nèi)容： 具體說明活動的主題、地點、形式和目標(biāo)。

發(fā)出邀請： 表達(dá)真誠的邀請，并提供必要的信息（時間、地點、意義等）。

2. 確定結(jié)構(gòu)：

開頭： 寒暄并點明寫信目的。

主體： 分兩（三/四）段：

活動內(nèi)容：介紹活動的主題、亮點和安排。

邀請細(xì)節(jié)：說明時間、地點，強調(diào)意義，并表達(dá)希望對方參加。

結(jié)尾： 提醒對方盡快回復(fù)并表達(dá)期待。

遣詞造句技巧

用詞精準(zhǔn)：

活動主題： 使用專業(yè)術(shù)語和具體表達(dá)，如“interdisciplinary learning activity”（跨學(xué)科學(xué)習(xí)活動）、“ecosystem”（生態(tài)系統(tǒng)）、“biodiversity”（生物多樣性）。

活動意義： 強調(diào)價值和體驗，用詞如“gain hands-on experience”（獲得實踐經(jīng)驗）、“explore connections”（探索聯(lián)系）。

避免重復(fù)：

替換簡單詞匯，如用“participate”代替“join in”，用“an enriching experience”代替“a good activity”。

自然過渡：

用銜接詞使邏輯清晰，如“Furthermore, we will...”（此外，我們還會……）、“It’s a great opportunity to…”（這是一個絕佳機會……）。

高級句式的運用

要提升作文檔次，可以適當(dāng)加入高級句式，包括定語從句、狀語從句、名詞性從句、分詞結(jié)構(gòu)、倒裝等。以下是具體方法：

1. 使用定語從句：

原句：We will visit a local wetland park to study its ecosystem.

高級：We will visit a local wetland park, which is well-known for its rich biodiversity, to study its ecosystem.

2. 使用狀語從句：

原句：Please let me know if you’re interested so I can reserve a spot for you.

高級：Please let me know as soon as possible, so that arrangements can be made in advance.

3. 使用名詞性從句：

原句：The activity will focus on exploring biology and environmental science.

高級：The main focus of the activity is how biology is interconnected with environmental science.

4. 分詞結(jié)構(gòu)：

原句：We will conduct water quality tests and discuss biodiversity protection.

高級：Conducting water quality tests and discussing biodiversity protection, we aim to gain a deeper understanding of the ecosystem.

5. 倒裝句式：

原句：It’s a great chance to gain hands-on experience.

高級：Not only is it a great chance to gain hands-on experience, but it also allows us to learn from experts.

潤色與表達(dá)提升

加入情感和個性化表達(dá)：

原句：I hope this email finds you well.

提升：I hope everything is going smoothly on your end.

原句：I believe it will be an unforgettable experience.

提升：I firmly believe this will turn out to be an unforgettable and inspiring experience.

增強說服力：

原句：It’s a great opportunity to learn.

提升：It’s a golden opportunity to delve deeper into the fascinating connection between biology and environmental science, which will undoubtedly broaden your horizons.

呼應(yīng)對方興趣：

可以提到對方的興趣或優(yōu)勢，如：

“Given your keen interest in environmental issues, I think this activity would be a perfect fit for you.”

劉凱老師獨家高級版：

Dear Jim,

I hope everything is going smoothly on your end. I’m writing to share some exciting news and extend a warm invitation to you. Our science club is organizing an interdisciplinary learning activity next week, and I believe you’ll find it fascinating.

The activity revolves around exploring the connection between biology and environmental science. We’ll visit a local wetland park, which is renowned for its rich biodiversity, to study its ecosystem. During the visit, we’ll conduct water quality tests, identify various plant and animal species, and discuss practical ways to protect biodiversity. Not only will this activity provide hands-on experience, but it will also be an eye-opening opportunity to learn from field experts.

The event is scheduled for this Saturday morning, from 8:00 a.m. to 12:00 p.m., and transportation will be provided. Given your passion for environmental issues, I think this would be an ideal chance for you to further explore your interests. Please let me know as soon as possible if you’d like to join us, so I can reserve a spot for you.

Looking forward to hearing from you soon!

Yours,

Li Hua